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Old April 3rd, 2008, 03:19 AM
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Death of the Queen

Title: Death of the Queen
Author: Snoewhite
Disclaimer: Implied Balian
Category: Kingdom of Heaven
Rating: G
Warnings: N/A
Synopsis:This is told from Sybilla's point of view about how Guy destroyed her heart and how she wants to learn to love again with Balian.

Death of the Queen

Disappointment reigns.
My love has been bled and drips from my veins
He never cared, only used and abused my heart.
A wreath of thorns surrounds it now.
Keeping me safe, not letting love start
How could I have been so blind
Stumbling in the dark refusing to see
That his queen of hearts was merely a court jester,
Yes that was me.

Disappointment reigns.
I’m tired of trying to break his chains
Wanting to love again, trust with reckless abandon.
That seed of innocence has died on the vines.
No longer can I look at the world through freshman eyes.
I hate him for that, the killing of my virgin heart.
Wishing to begin again and wanting a new start.
But that is only an illusion you see
There is no way I can trust anyone but me.

Disappointment reigns.
Help me break these chains
And be free to love again.
I want to feel, to banish the pain.
Help me forget my stupidity and guile
Teach me to feel again if only for a while.
You can do that you see
You are in my head
But it’s my heart that longs for thee.

This is the first time I have ever posted any poetry please bear with me..... Snoey

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Old April 3rd, 2008, 08:38 AM
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Congratulations on your first poetry post and I hope that you continue. This was wonderful, you could feel her disappointment and heartbreak and her longing.

Wonderful stuff
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Old April 3rd, 2008, 09:03 AM
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You are branching out big time Snoey! I know how daunting it is to post something for the first time, well done!

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Old April 3rd, 2008, 09:12 AM
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Great Snoey, and congrats on your first poetry post
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Old April 3rd, 2008, 10:00 AM
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good stuff Snoey! And claps for posting your first poetry.
I like this line particularly
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I hate him for that, the killing of my virgin heart.
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